Lord Grim Twilight Warrior
Posts : 432 Join date : 2009-09-23 Age : 32 Location : Look behind you >D
| Subject: Too Little, Too Late Thu Jan 14, 2010 3:41 am | |
| Too Little, too Late
A distant cry He calls for help No one hears him He shouts, pleads, begs for someone No one comes to him They are a bit too little too late
His wrists are bleeding Scarred by his terrible life He prays someone will notice He hopes someone will come this rescue Nobody comes to him No one even notices At a time too little too late
His heart aches His bones began to feel like jello Tears slowly drop A truth that was never meant to come out His life torn cause of this A simple truth meant to stay a lie Ruined what he thought as the perfect life It became too little, too late
He lies there, bleeding out his sorrows His life is nearing its end With no one around To hear his calls for help He enjoys his final moments alive The final moments that he will breathe the air Until this poor soul departs to the heavens Until he can finally realize the mistakes he’s made Too realize it was too little, too late
Blood-stained hands cover up his sorrows Crimson ink falls down slowly His life, its at the peak A life that he sought not meant to live for A life that his heart bled for A life that heads down a spiral of despair With no where to go but up into the skies A life too little to bother with A life too late to save It all has became too little too late
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Saradamon Lanaldor Court Magician
Posts : 653 Join date : 2009-09-23 Age : 30 Location : psst. dont turn around.
| Subject: Re: Too Little, Too Late Thu Jan 14, 2010 4:36 am | |
| very nice poem!!! :DDD
i dont just say that because it's dark and depressing (though i do like poems like that for some reason... no idea why...) but i know it's deep... once i find some vestige of meaning i'll get back to you (i suck at poem analysis XD) | |
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Lord Grim Twilight Warrior
Posts : 432 Join date : 2009-09-23 Age : 32 Location : Look behind you >D
| Subject: Re: Too Little, Too Late Sun Feb 07, 2010 8:40 am | |
| Anymore people, come on, i want more cnc on this poem :C | |
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SeaSalt IceCream Admin
Posts : 1221 Join date : 2009-09-22 Age : 31 Location : Being your hero.
| Subject: Re: Too Little, Too Late Sun Feb 07, 2010 9:17 am | |
| Mmmm Could be better if it rhymed, I always expect poetry to have a rhythmic motion, and it always flows better if it rhymes. | |
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Lord Grim Twilight Warrior
Posts : 432 Join date : 2009-09-23 Age : 32 Location : Look behind you >D
| Subject: Re: Too Little, Too Late Sun Feb 07, 2010 10:44 am | |
| Not always, sometimes Free-verse can always provide better flow then Rhythmic poetry. it all depends on how well the words go together, and if the message is sent. Imo, Free-verse is better then rhyming poetry. | |
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Saradamon Lanaldor Court Magician
Posts : 653 Join date : 2009-09-23 Age : 30 Location : psst. dont turn around.
| Subject: Re: Too Little, Too Late Sun Feb 07, 2010 5:34 pm | |
| - SeaSalt IceCream wrote:
- Mmmm Could be better if it rhymed,
I always expect poetry to have a rhythmic motion, and it always flows better if it rhymes. i, too, prefer free verse slightly. it's easyer to find meaning for me casue the rhyming distracts me ... it's like rhymes are shiny objects... | |
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